personified

Another older poem – for Thursday Poets Rally Week.

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“personified”

this early/late feeling
not adjusted or
acclimated to as
much as succumbed –
the persistent will of
a clock ticking
toxic, tenuous
into a lonely hall
sounds almost like
a symphony

I tried to give answers
to the questions,
burning in stone
ached to understand
and accept the
staleness of our
arguments –
only made fresh by
slashing wounds
that reopen at their
own volition

I have never aloud said
“I want to die”
because I never felt it
before –
but here it is now in
all its grinding glory
not to be acted on,
of course –
but the feeling, so rare
like that lingering of
you on my tongue
is omnipresent and
consuming

and echoes around this
room, vague and primal
slipping into my sleeves
leaving a sheen
giving life to yet
again another
abstraction
of senses
sharp
defined
clicking

click.
click.
click.

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15 Responses to personified

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  3. Jingle says:

    click,
    well done….
    enjoyed the abstract and wise word choices…

  4. Bernadine says:

    Wow, wonderful poem, filled with such intense emotion.

  5. bward42 says:

    I love the way the lines seem to fade away as the poem progresses! A very clever and powerful work; you really give a sense of vulnerability and heartache without going all dark and twisty, which is very rare and wonderful!

    http://thoughtunchained.wordpress.com/2010/12/02/red-planet-writer/

  6. Shawn Bird says:

    Interesting about the other being omni-present on the tongue- does this mean constantly talking about him/her as one is prone to do when early in love? (or just very obsessive?). I’ll be pondering this for awhile!

    My rally entry: http://shawnbird.com/2010/12/03/night-warmth/

    Shawn

  7. Emotional, abstract, and visual. Well done!

    http://mysticmarleei.wordpress.com/2010/12/03/7sins/
    Happy Rally!

  8. Heart felt in an uncompromising form. great job!

  9. NotATameLion says:

    “but the feeling, so rare
    like that lingering of
    you on my tongue
    is omnipresent and
    consuming…”

    Good God. I could relate to your poem until you wrote these lines. Then for the rest of the poem, I BECAME the poem. Sadly, I think your writing just transcended anything I will ever create.

    All I can say is Thank You for that poem.

  10. I just had to read this one out loud…phenomenal!

  11. Chamz says:

    sounds like abstract poem. nice!

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  14. Sam373 says:

    “toxic, tenuous
    into a lonely hall
    sounds almost like
    a symphony

    I tried to give answers…”

    Wow, it does feel that way!!!

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